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Monday, 28 August 2017

Poetry Monday

Poetry Monday was started by Diane of On The Alberta/Montana Border (you can find her in my sidebar).  Jenny O of Procrastinating Donkey joined in and, well, so did I.  We could use some more players.  Jump in.  The poetic water is fine.
This week’s theme is, ‘eclipse of life’.  You can’t blame Diane for this one, her hubs came up with it.  Use the theme or free style it…..rhyme or not…..we’d love to have you join us.

Insignificant
is how she felt,
invisible
beside the bright and shining lights
that were her siblings.
Those over achievers
‘can do’ believers
cast a long shadow.
The brain,
the beauty,
the artist;
they spread a shadow that was long, dark and cold.
It smothered her tiny spark.
When she decided
to remove herself permanently
they spoke of her smile,
her gentleness,
her caring nature
and how much she would be missed
and they wondered aloud,
"Why?"
She had been,
eclipsed.

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    1. I think a lot of us have/or do feel invisible.

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  2. So sad, and I know how she felt, while not being eclipsed so much as ignored in favour of the boys. Mum definitely preferred her sons.

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    1. Sometimes we just don't realize what we are doing.

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  3. Sad she didn't realise...understand...her light probably shone brightest of all....

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    1. It's true...the light of caring and understanding, the gift of a loving smile is worth so much in this world.

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  4. Touching eclipse you speak.
    My Monday poetry not chic,
    So for difference you seek
    See my Question Of The Week:-)

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  5. How terrible to feel like that. We are not all equal in our talents, but we all have value.

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    1. When the darkness of the 'life eclipse' descends it's hard to see your own value.

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  6. That one puts a lump in your throat, so many feel this way and it's horrible when they end it.

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    1. People need to talk more about how they are feeling and people need to listen more as well.

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    1. I'm sorry to hear that. I hope things are better now.

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  8. Very touching and I know of people who feel the same. It's sad that society places so little value on being kind. Well done, Delores. This is the kind of poem I was hoping to write and couldn't.

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    1. Thank you Jenny....I loved yours. It had me laughing out loud.

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  9. Oh, this is amazing! Heart-wrenchingly sad.
    And so, so true.

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    1. Thanks Diane. I'm really enjoying the challenge of being given a topic.

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  10. Such poetry
    That immerses me
    It's plain to see
    It reminds me of me
    Thinks of himself as the invisible man
    Who does what he can.

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    1. Well you are NOT invisible here. That's a fact.

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    2. Here I am! Thanks, Delores.

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    3. Once he was lost but now he's found......yay......you'll always be seen and heard here.

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  11. Excellent and moving poem, Delores. As the youngest of four siblings growing up, I felt eclipsed sometimes and it was awful. However, my sisters and brothers mainly made up for it by igniting my imagination in play and music. Poetry became very important and I still discuss it with my eldest sister. My contribution to Poetry Monday may be found at "Gardening With Geo." --http://lepslog.blogspot.com/2017/08/on-bridge.html

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    1. I'm sorry you had to go through that Geo. It seems I hit a chord with quite a few with this one. I'll pop over to Gardening with Geo shortly.

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  12. 'The light of caring and understanding, the gift of a loving smile is worth so much in this world.'

    It certainly is.

    All the best Jan

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  13. Thank for your very good article.! i always enjoy & read the post you are sharing!

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